I could see this being very cool if the voices were mroe in the background and not right in your face - or perhaps if they weren't in at all - this has a very interesting earthbound-like sound to it - but personally I just findthe lyrics distracting, repetetive and annoying. It has potential though! I also just realized this is a 2003 submission - perhaps you could return to it and make it better? If you are still makin music I am sure you're most likely worlds better by now :)
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