I like the cutesy pads at the beginning. The vocals sound a little over-processed, which detracts a bit from the sugary pop vibe of the harmonies and arrangement. Some of the vocal lines could use some re-recording too. The word “mine” doesn’t really come through very well at :28, for example. The lyrics themselves are a bit cheesy, but I like the post-chorus at :39 and the stop-start transition at :59. I would’ve liked the drums to be a bit sharper in the mix, but otherwise the balance is pretty good. I like the syncopations during the middle section, but sometimes you try to squeeze a couple too many syllables into the rhythmic framework there, like with “while I stare” at 1:08. Perhaps part of it is the way you articulate the vocals in that particular recording. I’m enjoying the second post-chorus as well and, despite the somewhat cliche elements of the arrangement, the piece comes together well towards the end. Parts of the piece could use some cleaning up, especially the mixing and vocal editing, but otherwise I like the blissful, forward-looking mood and the cutesy sound design and melodies here. Keep at it, Ectisity! ^^
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Structure, transitions, phrasing, and variety
Melody, tonality, harmony, and texture
Instrumentation and sound design
Emotion, atmosphere, and catchiness
Originality and uniqueness
Overall (how do the elements above interact?)
CAN'T SINK THE RISER
*in heavy weapons guy impression* Is nice.
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