= THIS IS AN OFFICIAL NGADM REVIEW =
This is based on my own NGADM scoreboard alongside with first impression when I first clicked on your track, which is very important for your new listeners who will listen to your future tracks. For the review, I listened to your track twice to pinpoint a bit more, the scores(points) are from listening only once. Take this review as a grain of salt, please don't take this personally. I don't want to tore anyone down, I want them to become stronger. The judges have different views on your same track, so just take it as another point of view.
Overall your track seems to drag through the different realms of music world. I had no idea how you'll carry me section after section, which was pretty captivating and interesting to listen to. I really like your usage of tubular bells, that was kinda creepy actually (in a good way). Can you hear the chopped off strings in 0:29? That means your release and attack is too short, which makes it sound really robotic. That sound effect in 0:51 was pretty ear-piercing, it would be better if you soften a little. As well as 1:10. Those drum sounds were really cool. 1:38 section made it sound too experimental, and I don't know what you wanted to say through that section, seemed a bit meaningless in my opinion. 1:59 could have been bigger, the percussion sounds stale. If you don't wanted it to be a climax, at least add a brass.
You relatively got a pretty high score among the participants in uniqueness, although those orchestral section backed a bit. But overall, I think you created a pretty solid experimental (you said industrial, but I thought this was experimental a bit more) track here. The composition was nice too, using varied instruments from strings to sound effects. Theme itself was nice, although it really didn't clarified much specifically.
Theme (How engaging is the melody?) 7/10