I like the gritty bass at the beginning and the cinematic strings. The Middle Eastern theme is a nice touch here. The sudden volume change at :27 was a bit jarring, and I wish the vocals were a bit more prominent in the mix. The burst of intensity at 1:04 works well, although it’s easy to get a little disoriented with the rhythmic syncopations going on at 1:11. The arrangement of the piece is a bit choppy here, although that does help emphasize the punchy, adventurous vibe of the piece to some extent. The piece was also missing some dynamic melodic content. Still, I think the vocals are very good, and the lyrics themselves are also rather enjoyable. Overall, nice work with the production, harmonies, energy, and sound design. The arrangement could be a bit more fluid, and the composition could be a tad bit more fleshed out, but otherwise I really like the thematic content of the piece and the storytelling here. Keep it up, LunyAlex! ^_^

Mixing, mastering, and balance
1.75/2
Structure, transitions, phrasing, and variety
1.25/1.5
Melody, tonality, harmony, and texture
1.75/2
Instrumentation and sound design
1/1
Emotion, atmosphere, and catchiness
1.5/1.5
Originality and uniqueness
1/1
Overall (how do the elements above interact?)
1/1
Composite score
9.25/10

I like a lot about this song, but damn the vocals are amazing. Reeeeaally good stuff! :)

Great job, my friend! The way the lyrics are spoken give an eerie vibe that makes the music give the impression of chaos and insanity. Very well done!

I'm assuming this is your vocals on this. You need some guitars to support your vocal style! Not that the heavy strings detract from your song here, but with this voice, I really, really want to hear it in the more traditional set up that I would expect to hear this in. Even in an industrial set up, this would sound amazing. Love the melodic material, and Johnfn is not exaggerating either in how good this is.

This is really good dude! Loving the egyptian scale thing especially!