Okay, 4 things....
1: the kicks were way to basic, try putting a techno pounder into the master mixer track of the kick and fooling around with the controls
2: the drums were a bit basic just a kick and the closed hi-hats
3: you need to have a lead synth, not just an arp, i'm assuming your using FL studio, try using a platnium saw in Sytrus
4: It was really repetive, and i saw that you tried to mix up the melody, but i didnt really flow well.
Voted 3/5 Nice try
Dj-UnKnOwN Check out my stuff to get the idea of making music, or even PM me i'll be glad to help you with the basics =)
yeah, i am pretty new to fl, i only have the express version, and the kick is basic because its the default, with the drums i basically got bored and just gave up, i can't use sytrus, because i only have it as a demo. thanks i will pm you