I like the cute, waltzy vibe at the beginning. The percussion is a bit cheesy, and the snares at :25 could be sharper in the mix. The melodic content is fun, but sometimes the progression is a bit choppy (the transitions at 1:00 and 1:23, for example, were pretty abrupt). The piece also doesn’t sound structurally complete. I liked the more mellow breakdown at 1:23, but I would’ve liked to see you hit the piece home with another climactic section later. Still, nice job with the harmonies, atmosphere, flavor, and rhythmic content here. Keep at it, Mrcoolisimo! :)

Mixing, mastering, and balance
1.75/2
Structure, transitions, phrasing, and variety
.75/1.5
Melody, tonality, harmony, and texture
2/2
Instrumentation and sound design
.5/1
Emotion, atmosphere, and catchiness
1.25/1.5
Originality and uniqueness
.75/1
Overall (how do the elements above interact?)
.5/1
Composite score
7.5/10

Incredible composition skills! The feel you brought out in this is very positive and enjoyable, which was definitely helped by your use of various instruments to tell a unique melodic story.

Also, I can't help but love your tagged inspirations for this - great musical references that make for a cool emotional combination!
(Edit: and if they're not "inspirations", then hey that is all to say I love your style!)

Well done!