I like the easygoing guitar at the beginning. The vocals sound a little thin and strained. Perhaps you took a little too much bass off of them in the EQ? The lyrics are a little bland, and some of the syllables towards the end of each vocal phrase, especially on the portamentos, sound a bit over-exaggerated. I think there could’ve been more variety in the instrumental texture, although the added riff at 2:09 does help alleviate that problem. Still, the energy and dynamic level is almost constant throughout this piece. I wish the composition had a little more shape and contrast in the harmonies and instrumental hierarchy. Overall, I like how you juxtaposed the desperate content of the lyrics with the mellow vibe of the guitar riffs, and the piece has a smooth, flowing texture. That said, the piece needed some more structuring and direction over time to maximize the emotional appeal. Keep at it, JoePimpz! :)

Mixing, mastering, and balance
1.5/2
Structure, transitions, phrasing, and variety
.75/1.5
Melody, tonality, harmony, and texture
1.5/2
Instrumentation and sound design
.75/1
Emotion, atmosphere, and catchiness
1/1.5
Originality and uniqueness
.75/1
Overall (how do the elements above interact?)
.5/1
Composite score
6.75/10