I like the sassy strings at the beginning. The mix is a bit too loud, though. It might help to lower some of the volume levels here. The murky bass at :16 is a nice addition to the texture, although the mix feels a bit bottom-heavy because of it. I’d recommend adding some high-pass filters or more careful equalization to make the texture sound cleaner and less distorted. The melodic content at :54 is great, though, and you clearly have a great sense of harmony and progression. Sometimes, it felt like the piece needed some sort of percussion to keep it moving along, or at least some reverb or something to make the string melodies sound a tad less dry. Overall, my main problem with the piece is definitely the production quality. Do you hear how muddy the texture sounds at busy places like :32? I think that’s largely because you have several instruments in here that are fighting for attention in the same frequency ranges, resulting in distortion of the audio output. You can fix that by using filters (often called “EQs” or “equalizers” in digital audio workstations) to remove overtones that are shared between different instruments. The range that’s really going to make your track sound muddy if it’s too crowded is any frequency lower than 200 Hertz or so. I’d strongly recommend removing those frequencies in every instrument except the bass here. You might even consider transposing the low string part up an octave to further separate that instrument from the muddy bass tones. After you clean up the distortion with an equalizer, there’ll be more room in your mix for cool effects like reverb and delay, but equalization is a good place to start. Otherwise, I really like the composition and sound design here. You’re clearly a talented composer. I think you just need to use a broader swath of production tools you have at your disposal in your DAW. Keep at it, Joe-Mega! :)

Mixing, mastering, and balance
.25/2
Structure, transitions, phrasing, and variety
1.5/1.5
Melody, tonality, harmony, and texture
1.75/2
Instrumentation and sound design
1/1
Emotion, atmosphere, and catchiness
1.25/1.5
Originality and uniqueness
.75/1
Overall (how do the elements above interact?)
.25/1
Composite score
6.75/10