I like the beat at the beginning. The blending on the vocals isn’t always great. Don’t be afraid to use mixing effects like reverb, chorus effects, pitch correction, compression, etc. to enhance the vocal quality. You have a nice voice, but making several different layers of vocals work like this is tricky without a little more help from your DAW. I like the lyrics, but I think the instrumental tracks could use a little more variety and prominence at some point. I like the pitch-shifting work done at 1:21 and the melodic free-styling in the vocals later in the piece, but there still isn’t a lot of structural variety here. It almost feels like you stuck two verses together and called it a song. Fleshing out the composition a little more would really help out this piece. Still, solid work here with the production quality, harmonies, sound design, and atmosphere. Keep it up, Jadelion! ^_^

Mixing, mastering, and balance
1.75/2
Structure, transitions, phrasing, and variety
.5/1.5
Melody, tonality, harmony, and texture
2/2
Instrumentation and sound design
1/1
Emotion, atmosphere, and catchiness
1.25/1.5
Originality and uniqueness
.75/1
Overall (how do the elements above interact?)
1/1
Composite score
8.25/10