your flow has no rhythm.
your flow need Rhythm, you got the potential to flow man, just stay on beat with your lyrics and it will sound alot better. listen to some 36 mafia or somethin, then you will know wut i mean. but the beat was ok, sounds like you are transitionin syles from trance/techno to hiphop. over all i kinda like it, good work but your skill need to improve.
Lets use this in a flash tell everybody
That beat was cool, with plenty of hooks and stuff. But the rapping was almost like MF Doom, just not fast enough. If you're gonna rap crazy, nonsensical syllables, rap it extremely fast so we don't know what the hell you're saying. Just experiment with speed and flow, and see if you hit any gold. Peace.
Keep my ratings up