There we're some potential parts and a lot of the beginning sounded like you were still looking for an opening.
The real problem was that a lot of it was off and on, like some parts would flow, but then it would lose it's potential by giving this feel that it would just jump into another.
A lot of the time the drums would cover up where the melody was supposed to be stronger, I would've liked to see you bring those parts out. One bad note choice in the beginning kind of ruined this more solid tone you had going.
Personally what I could see improvement in, is flow changes. A lot of the time you would just jump another part. Also when making the movement changes, try using your drums or a single opening line to go into that. Otherwise a decent song, with some great potential.
Keep working, I think you could possibly achieve a solid formula for the next part of the song, since this is only the opening/part 1.