It would've sounded much better if...
you used something other than that plain piano sound in the beginning. If the piano resonated more or use something more "electronic" then it would've fit with the rest of the track. Other than that, I think this is a pretty good start.
well, your right. i know the piano was pretty weak, but i just wanted to put something new on here. :P
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.