Hi there,
I don't really like the distortion on the guitar. "FabFilter Saturn" has some nice distortion presets, some of them are made specifically for guitar distortion.
What DAW do you use?
The overall mix is not that great, it sounds "cheap", this is because of the drums, they don't sound nice. Vengeance has some nice drum packs.
Conclusion:
I like this idea, it needs some work on the mix and composition.
Keep producing!
~Simon