Share Download this song

Author Comments

I missed the deadline by an hour. OOF.
For NGUAC Finals.

Log in / sign up to vote & review!

Newgrounds accounts are free and registered users see fewer ads!

The balance in this is pretty good. Nothing sticks out like a sore thumb, and I can hear the parts as individuals as well as a whole. It's a little compression-happy, but that feels appropriate for the genre.

The melodies are good, but the piece feels a little loopy to me. The riser at 2:16 is the first time I can hear you pushing the notes around (via pitch bend), but the rest of the track, while works formally, is a little repetitive. I had a teacher who used to browbeat us (students) for writing (acoustic music) directly into Finale because she said she could hear the copy and paste. She believed that even if you were repeating a section verbatim, by doing it with pen and paper it forced you to have an intimacy with the notes and you really had to consider if rote repetition was the right choice. I think a lot of times it's easy to be caught in the same trap with electronic music. We make loops, we copy and paste them, we layer loops in different ways, and then we end it. I am 100% guilty of doing this myself. The challenge with this sort of stuff is to find ways to keep things interesting. Dance music often lends itself to repetition, but the devil is in the details. I'd try to find ways to keep phrases fresh when they come back again, or if they are repeated exactly, make sure they pay off somehow.

That said, the sound design sounds pretty good, and I don't really have any critiques on the mix.

I like the bouncy piano chords at the beginning and the gradual fade-in of the synths and bass. The sidechaining on the drums is really heavy, but overall the mix is rather sharp, loud, and full. Really catchy rhythmic elements, and nice job with the melodic elements at :50. The arrangement of the piece is a tad generic, but overall my biggest problem with the piece is that it needed more harmonic depth and variety. I think the composition feels pretty stagnant and shapeless after a while, despite the quirky instruments and fun melodic riffs. I wanted to see you do more with the final drop to really hit this piece home, but instead it came off as a more rhythmically dense version of the first one that only served to highlight the over-compression problems. Despite this criticism, I think the fun sound design, danceability, and flavor of the piece still go a long way. Keep at it, YeahYay!

Mixing, mastering, and balance
Structure, transitions, phrasing, and variety
Melody, tonality, harmony, and texture
Instrumentation and sound design
Emotion, atmosphere, and catchiness
Originality and uniqueness
Overall (how do the elements above interact?)
Composite score

That piano in the beginning just doesn't sound good to me -- could be better served by even square waves.

I can definitely hear the race against the clock here. Mix has suffered a bit because of it. I think I hear distortion here and there -- probably overdrive, since it looks like this has been brick wall limited.

That said, that bass is fat, your pads sweet, and your leads syrupy.

Still, I am hearing what sounds like copy-pasting going on. Can't give extra points. Style switch-up may have me holding my tongue here.

By 2:26, yeah, I'm definitely hearing what sounds like overdrive. Try to leave more headroom before you apply any master FX.

Overall, track sounds very rushed, which is of course natural for these types of competitions, but the style switchups do redeem the piece overall. Pretty sick chord progression, and rock solid bassline. Enjoyed it a lot!

Thanks for coming out to NGUAC!

The main melody is good and catchy, though I think the level of repetition brought this down a bit (in some ways it sounds more like hip hop than dubstep.) Something like this could have benefited from theme and variation, but this is closer to theme and sound filters, with a few wub sounds and drops for the sake of the genre. Introducing a B section at 1:30 would have been a good start at keeping this fresh. There's a seed of a great song here, but most of what's built on that one melody is smoke and mirrors rather than substance.

Credits & Info


3.82 / 5.00

Aug 27, 2018
1:47 AM EDT
File Info
3.8 MB
2 min 45 sec

Licensing Terms

You are free to copy, distribute and transmit this work under the following conditions:

You must give credit to the artist.
Share Alike:
If you alter, transform, or build upon this work, you may distribute the resulting creation only under a license identical to this one.

* Please consider sharing revenue!