OK, the intro was awesome. I give everything on NG a 20 second listen. If it doesn't capture by then, I click go back a page, lol. After :40 it got muddy and lacked depth and instrumental clarity.
Fundamentally, a good track... perhaps bettered by some orchestal crescendo?
Just my opinion. OK. You've got the intro right, but need flesh on the bones, lol
Keep up the good work!