Nice intro here -- but I feel that big reverse cymbal needs some reverb and delay not to just... be super dry and anticlimactic.
Your drums are all over the place here. I can't tell where things are going, or why certain things are placed where they are.
Your chord progression is fine, but your piano attacks all sound the same velocity, and when you have those low chords, they're very congested sounding. Recommend some inversions. This has the potential to be very pretty.
0:21 feels like you started to do something and totally changed your mind. Could have probably done without that fast break. 0:39 chorus probably could have been repeated again.
0:52 texture and piano also probably could have done with a repeat before those interesting vocal sounding synths.
Really this piece sounds like a lot of disjointed ideas put together. I would recommend studying song structuring. This composition is pretty hard to follow, even though it has some pretty cool ideas going on. I would have rated a lot higher if I could understand the structure of the track better, where you were going compositionally, etc.
2:02, that lead is really, really loud. I had to turn the song down a bit and resume listening. It has been pretty loud throughout and pumping in and out volume wise. Not sure what's going on there.
Also not sure why the ride cymbal bell at the very end.
0:40 is probably the strongest section of your track. More like that. With less volume on that lead and probably a little less low-mids on your drums. They're a bit boomy. It's kind of like DnB, but I can't hear a bassline. That would probably be another thing to work on.
Definitely recommend checking out some tutorials for the genres you want to produce, specifically song structure, mixing, and mastering. Would love to see you revisit it someday once you've got a little more experience under your belt. 'Til then, keep at it! :)
ElderlyKite 
