Those ornaments are very baroque-esque. You really seem to like them don't you?
Sounds nice though. I feel like this would work well in a dramatic scene.
In terms of execution, I'd say it sounds a bit too static, some slight tempo changes might make it sound more natural (usually it speeds up and slows down, almost as if the music is "breathing") and give it even more emotional impact.
I'd also watch the levels before they hit the limiter (or compressor, idk) so the music gets more headroom and sounds less squashed.
This is just my constructive criticism, but overall I liked it a lot. Great use of counterpoint (I had to spend the entirety of last school-year learning about counterpoint .. so I recognised it right away, haha. You're better at it than I am.)