I like the thematic content and the dark mood. The bass bomb at the beginning is a bit excessive, but I like the gradual fade-in with the filtering on that bouncy synth (:18). I think you overdid the harshness at :17, and I think the drums could be a bit more creative in general. Once the progression starts taking shape at :28, things are looking up. I like the build-up into :46, and the melodic content at :46 is pretty sweet. The harsh, high-pitched synth at :46 was pretty unnecessary, though. I also like the glitch-y, distorted content at around 1:10. The transition at 1:24 was pretty sudden. The pace of the track just changes quite abruptly there. The part at 1:52 serves as a nice counter-theme, and you certainly keep me engaged with all of these build-ups and intense riffs. I thought the middle section (1:52-2:57) drags on for a bit long, though. You also seem to be a big fan of these booming walls of sound that serve as transitions (2:57, for example). I think that’s okay to do 1 or 2 times in a piece, but you overused it here. I think the mix could be quite a bit tighter. It’s mostly the high-pitched punctures (like :17), but some of the distortion (like 1:24) could stand to be reigned in a bit. The other big thing is transitions. You use a lot of filtering and risers to smooth things over, but at the end of the day there’s little on the other side of these transitions to complete the process (take a listen to 2:01, for example). Even the occasional crash would go a long way. Generally the instrumentation is good, but I thought the drums could’ve been a bit more polished at times (like 1:53). Overall, this is still strong work. You’ve clearly put a lot of effort into the automation, arrangement, and sound design. Keep at it, Abstrack!
Mixing, mastering, and balance
Structure, transitions, phrasing, and variety
Melody, tonality, harmony, and texture
Instrumentation and sound design
Emotion, atmosphere, and catchiness
Originality and uniqueness
Overall (how do the elements above interact?)