Chord progression is a little fast in your intro.

I would probably recommend taking the downbeats of your bass notes on that 4 string synth and either palm muting or modulating their velocity to about 30 versus what sounds like about the 90 they may or may not be at now. Those machine gun attacks are bothering me. I would probably recommend a free bass plugin like ABPL -- if you want a sample of the sound, I used it on "Old Wounds" in my catalog, which was front paged a while ago. Small, quality synth.

I also didn't like the rhythm of your lead. It sounded a little... cheesy? Eighth notes for the I chord, 16ths for the next, back to I with 8ths, then 16ths again. I know from hearing you write, you've got some better rhthms stowed away somewhere. I'm listening to those polyrhythms at your drop and thinking to myself, man, why didn't that occur to ya sooner? :P

Like your snare. Good piece, solid pacing. Just a couple minor gripes is all. :)

Not a huge fan of this kind of music, but I liked that the noise level here was a bit more toned down and subtle - from a surface level at least, I think that sets this song apart a bit. My biggest criticism would be that the song doesn't feel like it progresses much.

I just realized the CD art is the principal from Baldi's Basics