This isn't that bad of a piece, but there are a few things I'd like to point out (*deap inhale*):
Each phrase doesn't seem to go that far, not because of your unusual chord progressions but because of the guitar instrument itself. You use one sample of an overdrive guitar which would sound great as backup, but not as great as the entire melody. You need more instruments and more variation. The drums are as repetitive as you can get. If this was written on sheet music, the percussionists would be asking, "Do we get to do anything else?"
Sorry about being a pain in the butt; I hope you keep improving and get constructive criticism from friends/family/anyone else.
its isent really that cool
it aint the best but it still sucks
What do you mean? Saying that something sucks isn't a review.