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Big City

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So, here's the second song I have ever recorded by myself. I used to play this with one of my previous bands. I composed everything so, chill, Newgrounds.

Please comment down below if you liked the song! Maybe I'll continue doing this, who knows?

Lyrics
I don't get this problem, with owning all and stuff
Leaving back your own life, like someone had enough.
I can be independent from the comfort of my home
and travel sounds so far away, I'll just let this one go.

I like my people and I like my space, don't want to live with the human race, don't always like to be in a big city.

There is too much trouble, being a material fiend.
Say you love it all, sell your soul indeed.
I won't get to judge you by the color of your skin,
the clothes that you wear, the money you hold dear.

I like my people and I like my space, don't want to live with the human race, don't always like to be in a big city...

You can also find me on SoundCloud:
https://soundcloud.com/julio-ortega-21/big-city-final

Instagram:
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Or YouTube:
https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCscjeO8FQJOTp94E5Fdb5IQ

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Smooth riffs going on here. Track looks compressed to death though, and it shows throughout when the vocals and drums are buried in louder sections. I can hear what almost sounds like clip distortion occasionally.

Vocals really need to come up in the mix, and rather than recommending turning them up, I'd actually turn everything else down. Those rhythm guitars are taking up 80% of the space in the mix.

Distortion is starting to affect the drums around 3:22, I suspect due to the low end on those toms not being reined in. Otherwise, this is perfect bar rock.

Solo section is great. I would recommend double-tracking that 5% left and right respectively, or slapping on a chorus. Right now it sounds very tin-can-y.

Overall, sounds like a fair mix with a bad master on it. Before you master your tracks, recommend having about 6 dB of headroom. Leaves room for compression to do its job. Not to mention, your track won't be clipping, distorting, or pumping in and out after all FX are applied, all three of which are happening here.

Smashing track though. Only other complaint would be first couplet of your verse is kinda wimpy writing, and diction is hard to understand. "Leaving back your own life" doesn't make grammatical sense. "Owning all and stuff" is kinda word salad.

Otherwise, great.

dude2312 responds:

Wow, this was a great critique which I welcome with open arms. It was my third time (ever) recording my own songs. Under no circumstances would I consider myself a professional on this, one thing that I can tell you is that I am going to get better at it!

Thanks ever so much for taking the time to listen to my track.

It hurts to dock your score because I'm really digging the sound (huge fan of both the solo and the chugging guitar,) but there are some problems with this.

Most of the issues have to do with the vocalist. He's not bad, per se, but he's slightly off beat sometimes, and the delivery doesn't fit - it's too quiet and passive for how aggressive the guitars are, and really only sounds good during the downtempo bridge at the 3:00 mark. Short of that, the riffs did get vaguely repetitive and I remember one or two instances where it seemed like a perfect opportunity to squeeze in different melodies but you didn't.

dude2312 responds:

Hey, man. No worries, I definitely appreciate any feedback. I play all instruments on all of my songs. I'll definitely keep that in mind.

Thank you for checking me out!

Woah, very nice.
I like that solo.

dude2312 responds:

Thanks ever so much!!

Not my type of Rock, but this definitely sounds like a full song. Sounds great!

the 80's wants its kickass riffs back.
my only problem is audio (it's peaking) but hot diggity damn is it a great track

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Score
4.57 / 5.00

Uploaded
May 28, 2018
2:49 PM EDT
Genre
General Rock
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Song
10.5 MB
4 min 35 sec

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