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aim 2018 submission piece

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https://www.newgrounds.com/art/view/linda-mota/chewing

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Official AIM2018 review!

Liking the intro with the lo-fi drum loop. Wish it were just a bit shorter or had a transition into that bassline. Maybe swooshy reverse cymbals. I love those.

Bassline itself is par for the course with the genre. Not bad. Actually interesting chord progression!

The synths are appropriately off key, representing the sexual depravity of our art subject.

Your snare and bass drum are hiding really badly in the mix. Bring 'em up!

I do like what you've done with those moaning distorted feedback shrieks. They totally overwhelm the track though. Pull those down. They're very pretty, but not so pretty I only want to hear them.

Your weakest point is your transitions. Stops and starts between sections, etc. Make your transitions obvious, say, with risers, filter sweeps, reverse cymbals, and crashes.

Outro is the strongest portion of your song. I really feel like that should have been your choruses. Sounds like 80's basement prog. Still, I see a lot of potential in you just hearing this track.

Check out some tutorials for your genre, particularly mixing, song structure, and finally mastering, and you'll take off in no time. You've got what it takes!

Thanks for turning out for this year's competition!

---Official AIM review---

I like the beat at the beginning, although the instruments sounded a tad unpolished. The progression is really slow, and I think you needed a smoother transition into :53. The harmonic elements at :53 sound quite dissonant, with the bass line and the melodic riff noticeably clashing. The more atmospheric elements at 1:46 were a good idea, but I think that section suffers from the same problem: too much dissonance. I’d suggest laying out the chords you’re trying to use ahead of time. Even if you don’t know much about music theory, it can be a lot easier to hear these kinds of jarring dissonances when they’re on a generic piano sample than when they’re spread across several different instruments in different octaves. I’m not saying you should actually use a generic piano in your piece, but putting all of the notes in one place in order to construct a harmonic framework is usually a good starting point for identifying what needs fixing. Besides that, I thought the kick was a little weak and the overall texture quite repetitive. I appreciated the increase in intensity at 2:40, but even then the snare sounds a bit indistinct. My favorite element of the piece is definitely the atmosphere - you nailed the creepy mood and sound design. That said, I think you went too far with the clashing notes, my main concern for the piece. Overall, you made some bold choices with the texture here, but only the atmospheric elements paid off imo. Keep at it, Fibr!

5.5/10

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May 26, 2018
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Synthwave
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3 min 36 sec
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