I don't feel you've added a whole lot to this, just made it skip every now and again. I like the idea you had at 2 minutes but you took it way too quiet and did't let those dampens at the start and the middle last long enough, just by a fraction of a second because it felt out of time. you also cut my favourite part of Logic's song out- the ending where its just his singing with simple backing. Overall i think this needs a bit of work, hence the low rating but i'm gonna give you a follow cause i wanna see what you make of this.