Welp, I can't help but rip apart this song with this review, because there is so much wrong with it.
(Sorry if I hurt your feelings but I'm just trying to help in this review,)
Honestly not sure if this is a joke song or a valid attempt at creating music. : /
We'll go over the positives first anyway.
Positives:
The best thing I can give to you for this track is that it has decent chord progression and has many well placed melodies and bass-lines in certain places. A lot of them add a pretty decent atmosphere to what you did here.
I like the vocal chopping you did around 2:09 - 3:00 but the little "awoo" you put there really disrupts the mix in a unsatisfying way, and the "ois" that are there are too loud to fit properly within the little drop you have here.
The sub that you use in the sound is implemented pretty nicely, and sometimes it gives certain parts of the song some depth.
Negatives:
I might as well address the elephants in the room here.
The mixing you have done here is really, really poor.
When you assembled all of the instruments together to your piece its like you forgot that too high volume in the master channel results in a really ugly form of distortion.
(Be sure to manage the level of your master and the instruments in order to have a pleasant, clearer sound)
The worst example is within 4:05, its so distorted and the frequencies are so poorly balanced that all I can hear is a ugly mashup of noise near the lower end.
Your vocal samples that you provided with your voice severely need some sort of autotune/modification to not sound horribly awkward with what you have. They almost ruin what you have at the beginning of the sound, which has some decent progression on its own.
Your transition into 4:02 to 4:05 is extremely awkward and the riser you put there is way too quick to compensate. You transition from a cheerful game-ish themed area to a really, REALLY ODD part. It doesn't blend at all with what is going on before it and overall is made much less appealing to the ears with the vocal additions.
You have a pretty poor use of reverb throughout many portions of the song, at times it makes the song have less of an atmosphere due to layers of it stacking up too quickly, causing everything in it to sound muddy. Remember that the point of reverb is to add depth to your instruments, making some seem farther away than others. Here you add it to almost everything and add too much.
Theres very little separation between the instruments, as in all your instruments seem to play with lower frequencies which kinda hurts the sub-bass you are using as well.
I have moderate suspicions that you used a variety of presets from certain generators, but thats for another review, as there's much more wrong here than just that.
D73.
Force64 
