Official AIM2018 Review!
Trying not to be overly vague or brief here. Let me just jump right in.
Your vocal mixing/recording is getting much better. Super proud of you. Still feel like you do yourself a disservice not singing out in the beginning, but in a way, it gives you a bit more room to grow later on.
I will say right off, the free-verse-ish lyrical writing is extremely well done -- better than Disney could have done it, imo, and if not for some mixing and compression issues, this would have been very close to a flat 5 for me, for that reason alone. If I could hear a bit of sniffling as you were singing that first bit, the airy-breathy sound you were going for would have really enhanced tone.
Compositionally, awesome work. Only a few complaints of muddy mix, some elements sticking out a bit too far in the soundscape, others being all about the same volume and thus hard to hear. Perhaps too much reverb tail as well. Chord progression is solid and totally fits the mood. Instrumentation is clearly well thought out and does the job. I would have liked a little more volume on the piano to more properly accompany your vocals.
2nd refrain is where you come into your own -- and those backup vocals sound GREAT, complemented by that theremin. Seriously, nice sound. More of it please.
The rest of the track flows like hot butter. Only wish it were a bit more compressed, but I understand you may be approaching this similar to mixing classical music, which must have a lot of dynamic contrast. Still, I'd like that high point of the song, full steam ahead to the outro, to approach somewhere around at least -1 dB headroom. You had some very powerful sections that would have benefited seriously from just a bit more volume, if not some moderate compression.
Anyway, super glad you turned out for this year's competition. You've both come a long way -- getting better every day!