- bad balance, it feels like you just cranked everything up and threw it into a limiter
- too loud, no dynamic range
- sound design is too similar throughout
- transitions are bad, try using something else than just filtering
- having the bass constantly hit with the drums at :50 or so just doesn't work, especially considering there's no form of ducking there
with all of that being said, my favorite part was around 1:18ish