hey, my old friend. remember me?
it seems like you got a major improvement in the time that have passed. i know you meant the best for this song. so lets talk about what we have here.
the main idea for the song is very good. you still have problems performing it.
keep on your ideas, but don't let them sound too gayish like in the "green" song. the less wuss-like instruments you'll have, the better. for an example : this saxofon instrument.. it just ruins it. the xylophone is great, but don't let it go to your main-stream all the song, xylophone is usally a side-instrument.
you have a good intention on the drums, and you know how to perform them. you have a great potential, and you must fix those little issues before you are a rockstar.
the timing little issues? you know, one bit sounds wrong here, one bit sounds wrong there. it's critical that you have everything aligned and placed right. here some tip from me : when you are doing something, divide it into partitions. and its better if you won't mix couple of instruments in one partition. work on one instrument alone - with the metronom tool (its a tempo like - if you don't have any, then some kicks running in the background would be enough)
you must align your beats, and notes according to the beats of the metronom, and don't let anything escape this rule. after you've done aligning your one partition - hear it along with the other partitions .. if its right, then continue, if not , then you must fix something there.
another issue i've noticed is the volume changes. remember : you DON'T want to change your volume so bad during a song. don't mess with the volume, and its better if you choose a constant volume at the beginning of the construction, and go with it - and if you want more volume, then don't change the volume of the instrument itself, but change the volume of the notes. and if you really like more volume then duplicate the same insturment. just don't change the volume dynamically in this type of songs.
best important is, don't let yourself get out with "oh well, whatever, it sounds good enough" if you can fix it, then grab the power in order to fix those issues.
anyways, i liked the song and i gave it 8/10. just work according to my tips and you'll see what improvement there will be.
holy cow, thats a long review!
yes, i have improved monumentally, but still have a few lightyears to go before reaching the status of my heroes, ISAN.
sounds really good it relaxes my mind
yes! finally somebody who's brain ISN'T made out of penises!