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Okay, so I may not quite have much to offer since most of the biggest points have been made already, plus I'm generally more into electronic stuff, but this was quite interesting. Your voice does sound pretty interesting, honestly the fact that it kind of sounds imperfect compared to more standard vocalists makes it kind of stand out to me in a good way, makes it feel more authentic I guess. You did kind of stray off key at 1:49 though, that could use a fix. And I also feel like more elements could be added to make it sound more complete, though maybe that's just the point since it's only a demo. I think it could easily turn into a solid lo-fi hip-hop sort of thing, with like soft percussion and subtle elements and all that stuff. Overall nice job, pretty impressive that you made those lyrics yourself, keep it up ;)

hey this is actually very good, I think that with a proper production it could totally be a soundtrack for a movie or something

the slaps could be a bit quiter as already mentioned, but other than that I like it very much

I'll give it some more listens :)

...and bitches ain't shit, keep it up

Chorus on that guitar is interesting. The slaps are juuuust a bit too loud. Could be EQ'ed out probably, or adjust the mic position farther from the bridge.

Songwriting is good, especially the little runs. Now, execution could be ten times better if you would come out of your shell and sing out. It sounds a bit like you're in a range you're not quite comfortable with judging by the pitch weebling. Don't worry. It happens to the best of us. A little more confidence and I can see greatness in you.

There's also a bit of noise in what sounds like the 17-12khz range. You can probably safely EQ or noise-cancel that out.

Also would like to hear that last note ring out rather than clip off.

I'm also tempted to ask to remix this one. I seriously love that progression.