This sounds pretty good! I like the structure, and the general character of the song. That being said... what happened to the snare? I don't know if that was a design choice to keep the snare in the background or not, but either way, it's doesn't make for an energetic track that wants to keep moving forward. Snares are super, and I mean SUPER important for keeping tempo and characterizing the song. Also, during a buildup and its drop, the atmospheric stuff usually goes away to heighten the energy. Also, it seems like you have some elements that just get drowned out by other things going on in the track. Typically, that's remedied by removing frequencies that interfere. If there's some mid-range synth that's messing with a vocal, you can cut out some of the frequencies of the synth and/or the vocal to make the two elements clearer and more distinguished from one another.

I dunno. Just try to fix problems that you come across, and make sure that you notice as many problems as you can.