Could use a lot of work...
Opening... not nice. I hear a very boring-sounding synth (or is it a piano?) playing half-decent chords... a bass comes in with a little better to show but not much. The song's improving as percussion comes in... but some of your drums are weak. Nice transition there...
Your melody's simple and it's catchy. I like this one a lot... the one thing that's keeping me from overwhelming you with flattery about it is the synth choice. It feels very boring... at times you go over the top with VERY weird synths. This is the main problem with this song - your synth choice needs a lot of work. You need all of your choices in synths to work towards one particular attitude or emotion... not that I get very much of an emotion from this type of song, but still, try. Finally, it gets pretty boring and the song seems to drag on... you barely change the basic melody at all. You could try making a new melody, and you could alternate between the two. Maybe even mix them together if possible for some nice harmony.
Harmonies are decent, but lacking. Later in the song they get better, but still there's nothing, i.e. a pad, to support the song. Thus that empty feeling I'm getting from this song... mind you, a pad isn't always necessary, but it sure helps in filling in the empty spaces. Synth choice again is the worst part of these and you need to work on it - but everything else is good: notes complement each other, there are nice note progressions, etc.
Percussion is one of the better parts of this song, though it could still use work. I hear a nice, strong kick... I like that a lot. No suggestions there. Your hihat is at times very weak, and at times just right. Your clap, finally, I don't hear as often as I'd like to - that sample's a great one and sounds very original. I don't hear creative rhythms in the drumming very often, though it's there. You just need to build on it more.
Again, most of this song needs work attitudewise. Your synths don't all contribute towards the same atmosphere... thankfully enough, I can say your note progressions and drums do. Keep trying here... it'll come with time.
Overall a decent song... hopefully you'll get better as you go, because this one seriously could be better. I don't think it's as much in need of remastering, as it sounds pretty good to me qualitywise, save that hihat which is quiet at times. I'd suggest save a new version for experimenting and then do just that - experiment with synths, with FX, etc. until you get something that sounds really, really good. That's what I'd do, anyway, after recieving a review like this.
I hope all of my advice helps you. Why don't you stop by my audio page sometime, review some of my latest? Much appreciated, and keep trying.
Wow... nice review. Thanks for the tips. Could you give me your MSN messenger e-mail so you could help me out? Again, thanks for the great review.
change up the notes a little!!!
and the begging was way to long and boring!!!!
this was very quiet and boring... :(
when you mixed the 2 beats together it sounded bad....
i liked the electric warp thing that was cool!! ^^
maybe add a bass that plays off beats on beats 2 and 4 playing the same notes or sumthing....
i really liked the snare roll :D
good job! sorry for me listing the bad. but hey i think you'd want to know.....
Kewl! Thank you so much! I like to hear what I did wrong more than what I did right. How much can I learn from the good? Tell me all the bad you hear so I can change it and perfect the song.
I know... I was kinda sketchy about mixing the beats.
It was a clap roll LoLz.
Thanx a lot!