Right off the bat I like very much! You got a great "seat of the gods of machines" vibe going on - not sure about the glitchy percussion.. but I definitely like the direction it is going :)
starting to sound a bit clippy though.. perhaps too many buzzy samples.
Nice amen break there, but its drowning out the synth behind it - still some very nice sounds going on in here!
Around 2:20 and it starts feeling there is too much being crammed into the mix for the mastering the way it is to properly accommodate, and this is where a lot of peaking starts to happen. I like it, but the mix is getting rather messy.
The part around 3:20 is rather different - has a bit of an earthbound feel to it :)
The part around 3:45 is very nice - the sounds are still a bit too big for your mix though.
4:20 is actually pretty nice as well, I like the short bridge merging into it
still good attempt! Keep it up!