The synth "telephone" sound is way too loud, comparing it to the background bass noise. Plus, no drums or whatsoever.
Better luck next time!
and like you'res are any better!
The beggining sounded like you were dialing a telephone in front of a fan. It was boring, and annoying. I'm not trying to be mean, but listen to it for yourself before submitting it. Then, it changes sort of randomly and you've got an ok sounding synth that's just looped and sped up and down. Then there's a new sound. And it starts over.
Not really a composition that screams "I spent a week on this". It seems like you're new at this, so try spending time learning and experimenting. Above all else, put some real effort into your submissions, and they'll turn out ok.
If you have the time, could you listen to my new song, "Beliefs Breaking Away"? I'd really appreciate a review. http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/view.php?id=1450070
don't put a link on one of my audios again!