Some clipping in the right ear, digital artefacts. Not sure what from. Later on in the track I hear more artefacts in the left.

Other than that, writing is good. Mixing is kinda off. Your guitars are lacking that searing 7-12k edge. They bleed a little bit into your bass which needs to be fixed on EQ. Your bass could use a bit more compression and more attention to the attack and release. Sometimes it stops short and sounds less organic for it.

This kinda reminds me of Korn and some old djent. Good sound. Lacking a little vision, but not bad by any means. I do like your guitar tone outside of the muffled sound. That could be coming from any EQ on the master even.

Outro was waaaaay too short and sounded kinda lazy. Should have at least been another repeat of that phrase.

I like the tranquil mood at the beginning, as well as the ominous tint. The progression with the heavy guitars is enjoyable. I like how you contrasted the energy and passion throughout the piece, although the slower part at :58 lacks a strong sense of direction IMO, and also drags on a bit long. Much of the piece is pretty minimalistic, despite the appeal of the atmosphere and mood. The rhythmic elements of the piece are good, but I definitely think you needed another melodic section towards the end to hit the piece home. The repetition of the riff at the beginning wears on me after a while, and the piece doesn’t really feel climactic or conclusive by the end. Strong start, but this needed more effort put into the composition. Keep at it, InYourDreams! ;)

8/10

ah im bummed this was rushed for you cuz you're one of my favorites (and this already is pretty awesome)! hope to hear more from you soon :>

This is very impressive for something that was done in a day!
I love the more melodic part, it really has a soul and emotion!
However it sounds a bit repetitive, only has 2 parts that basically repeat (surely for the lack of time)
Good job!