Seriously...

The drums were too loud, and that ruined the effect of the song, if you made them slightly quieter, the song would sound so much better. Try to learn how to mix. Balancing out the sounds is all you need to do, everything else is a-okay. The composition strikes me as more than just decent. Turn the bass drum down, a little down on the hi-hat, and a little on the snare, and you'll be a lot better off :D

-Care to check my audio?

-ImperfectDisciple-