Not much to say honestly, sounds like your best to me. I just think you dragged out the lofi effect a bit too far. Also consider adding some vinyl crackle sounds in the background, would have liked to hear that. (there's a 10 minute loop on youtube i think) Other than that, nice job! 3.5/5
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