The piece overall is distorting to the point of not being enjoyable at the louder points. Also seems you added reverb before distortion on that initial synth. The exception is around 1:09, where only the drums are lightly crunched. I'm not sure where this piece melodically centers, or what you're trying to convey, but the louder it becomes, the more unintelligible it seems. Keep that in mind when mixing heavily distorted genres. The more sounds you add, the more confusion you make.
The distorted synths at the beginning are cool, although I think I would’ve toned down the reverb a bit before you clearly established the chord progression at :06 - the reverb adds more to the texture when there’s more space in the mix. That’s a pretty small detail, though. The heavy chords at :16 sound a bit generic (the instrument, that is), and the drums at :38 are very distorted. I’d probably adjust the equalizing a bit in those chords to make some more room for drums, and some compression wouldn’t hurt. The transitions at :49 and 1:10 are pretty sudden, and I’m a little confused about the direction of this piece overall. There’s not much melodic content or cohesion, either. I appreciated when you stripped away the beat and pads at 2:15 for some structural variety, but I also would’ve liked to see you experiment more with dynamics and phrasing in this piece. The sound design is pretty cool, but I really think you need to go easy on the reverb and add some clarity to the mix. Panning is also a good tool to use to clean up the mixing. The lack of melodic content and constant distortion really hurt this piece a lot. There are some neat ideas here, but the production quality lacks clarity, and that detracts from my enjoyment of the piece. Please focus on mixing and mastering going forward - improving these skills is a major step towards making a strong piece. Tell you what: if you make a piece that has a cleaner mix, PM me and I’ll give you a scout. Good luck, man. ;)
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