I like the relaxed atmosphere at the beginning. The vocals are really breathy and conversational, and sit really well in the mix. I also like the lyrics a lot themselves. The instrumentals are pretty minimalistic through the first chorus, though - I think you missed a bit of an opportunity to enhance the texture and creativity of this piece there. I like the melody at 1:14, but the instrument itself is a little cliche. You have a habit of failing to enunciate some of the consonants here - 2:09 sticks out to me as sounding like “appen” instead of “happen,” but there are other examples too. I think that the chorus needs a little more substance and drive that identifies it as the chorus - some drums and secondary melodies could really help there. The coda was really enjoyable, though. I like the theme of the piece a lot. The mixing and mastering is also really well done, btw. Solid work overall! Earned a spot in my favorites, in fact. ;)
Holy fucking shit... this is beyond amazing, man!
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