i think it sounds good man. i like your style, keep it up.
It was very good, but alike a lot of what I've heard before. It lacked no skill, but it didnt keep your interest much.
I think it needs more work
I think people should review more often even a critic would be fine at least the person have the joy to know that people care about your effort.
Ok here is my comment about this track.
I think its too repetitive, I think you were trying to make it catchy but something went wrong.
I like the second part you certainly worked the song
with alot of effort on that part but remember you need to make balance between the first and second part.
Even if my review was low I dont want to discourage you after all I am not an expert myself but I heard your other songs and I liked them and compared to this one I can tell you were not that inspired.
Originality: 7 Because even if it has its own unique shape there are some missing components.
Diversity: 4 Because its way too repetitive
Clarity: 10 The sounds and instruments are very clear and good coordination.
Effort: 6 Compared to your others songs like Desire it needs more work.
Overall: 8 Consider this as a critic review and I had to give you some credit after all there are not really that many musicians in the world with talent and you got the talent just keep working.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.