maybe drop the volume on the lower parts of the piano, make the ride cymbals go every beat instead of every other one. around 1:10 maybe have the piano come back with a filter instead of being right in. around 1:40 you made the melody out of time, which can be heard really well. other than that its a nice song, can use some work but its a nice 1st attempt, keep it up!
somehow this reminds me of some modern pop songs, but that's probably just me.
one thing i think could improve this song is to add another layer on top of the main melody to help compliment it.
also, your drum kick is pretty bass-y which is good but in this case i feel like it overpowers everything else a bit, including your bass. you should definitely try to up the power of your bass or maybe add in another bass layer.
overall, its not bad, the first transition made me think it would drop into an epic beat but it has a short slower part right before before it drops the beat.
Thanks for the feedback! I will EQ my kicks next time
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