Erm.......... good job on the riffs?
Love the jazz idea.
I have to be honest, I don't really like it. This could have been done a lot better. Don't use Jazz, you are much beter at this than this song says.
NO OFFENSE BUT SERIOUSLY U HAVE DISCRACED GUNS n ROSES
This was an ok song. There's alot more you could have done with it.
First of all, the sax needs to become atleast a piano because it sounds so weird and doesn't fit this tune. Second, there's no bass when it's supposed to come in. Don't only use a crash and hi-hat for it. Put in there was the bass. You need that to be much louder. Also this song was very repetitive. Add at least a chord structure into it on a pad would sound really good.
That's the bad stuff. Also you need to add in more melody's even though the song doesn't have any more. Try and make up a few.
Srry, but this needs alot of work.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.