The riff at the beginning is catchy, but I think you overdid the reverb. It sounds really muddy, which is why putting that much reverb on bass instruments is not usually a great idea. A lot of the instruments here are really generic and harsh-sounding in the mix. I think you need to use equalization to eliminate the harsh treble tones, and also the low frequencies in instruments besides the bass and kick. This piece has a lot of really sudden transitions, and adds and subtracts instruments in quite an arbitrary manner. I think you also went overboard on the distortion at 1:43. Despite the lack of cohesion, the piece is actually very minimalistic throughout. In the future, I’d highly recommend structuring your piece around some sort of melody instead of a couple of riffs that take turns dominating the texture. Harmonies, as well as variation in the drums, could also help you more effectively transition between sections of the piece. I’d encourage you to listen to one of your favorite pieces and analyze the structure, trying to mimic the structure in your own work until you get a better feel for how to keep the listener grounded. Once you feel like you’ve written a piece that’s a little more smooth-flowing and structured, send me a PM and I’ll leave you another review. Good luck! ;)
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