The synth is nice, and so is its tune!! But maybe: try to vary with its cutoff, panning, etc.. Just select a new channel, get to the start of ur song, press record and play while you turn the soft-synth or mixerFX buttons (you dó use Fruity Loops don't ya?) Build up that tension rather then just volume-gaininglike adding the basedrum. I can imagine with a better tension build-up, variety you could make some hard shiit.
I can imagine percs and a highpitched synth or something coming in after the end of this snippet. And maaaybe again, try adding a very subtile sub in the kick ;), edit it with ur volume wide open and it'll be okay.
Good luck building it out!
Thanks for the review!
I'll probably be adding a longer version of this, using your tips.
And yes, I do use FL Studio.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.