I agree with the others, nice effort though.
I agree with John. The mix hits and misses in points. Your vocals at least are compressed well and not drowned... unlike the drums. I like the idea. Songwriting is good. Implementation needs work. Less reverb on those drums and more compression for them. They're hiding.
Your singing could use better intonation and a little more focus on the notes you want to sing. Sliding all around them with some portamento is fine but centering pitch is fundamental to producing a good sound.
Guitar mixing is hit and miss as well, sometimes even the tuning. I enjoyed the piece, but there's plenty of room for improvement. Keep plugging at it and you'll get there!
Thanks for the review and encouragement!
not a bad start mandarien! the biggest problem that im seeing right now is that the mix is pretty bad, it seems very compressed and kinda funky. also your singing sometimes misses the notes slightly. still, its a good start and when these issues were fixed this song could be great! :)
Thanks! Yeah, I hope to improve and get there one day.
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