This is a very interesting experiment, but that bass synth is so ungodly loud I can't get into the groove. I also am not really liking the sweeping pans on the drums. It doesn't really fit the artwork, or my ears. I can tell you've got talent, but there seems to be something missing in this mix -- something that would make all this gel together. I couldn't tell you what that would be, but it probably has to do with a concise, soaring melody above this otherworldly vibe you've crafted.
Around 7 seconds in, that synth is WAY too loud, I love the effect on the drums, but I've got mixed feelings about this piece. It's an interesting experiment, good mixing, but I'm not really sure about the structure, the melody. It also seems to be missing something. Different, interesting, but lacking something. And really repetitive. Keep working, you've got talent.
Thanks for the review! The feedback is very helpful. :)