Hey dude, I finally got a moment to leave a review here (helps that I'm going to judge the ngadm too).
I don't have enough time to really leave too much detail, but here are some tips I'd primarily give:
- More stuff like the synth that comes in around 0:30. That's a great sound, and introduces things quite well. More development and variation with it would be a really neat touch.
- Your weak spot is your mixing still, unfortunately. Srsly dude, you gotta spend some time focusing on mixing or have someone do your final mixdown for you if you don't have time to. If you're working on it yourself, primary things I'd suggest would be (a) reducing mid frequencies especially on strings. They don't need to always be massively full, especially when everything else is sharing the same frequencies. Check a spectrometer to see the strongest overlap and reduce it until there's not as much overlap. Otherwise, make sure you don't have excessively strong reverb, try putting EQ before and after it to filter out naughty frequencies that don't do well.
-Endings. I think this one ended a bit too abruptly.
Those are the biggest things that stick out to me immediately. Pretty good piece. Good luck if you make it into the NGADM!