I think this tune is still a bit high-pitched, and too high a frequency. It actually sounds pretty neat otherwise, however the tune sounds a bit muffled up and distant. I reckon if you fix those problems, This will come out more enjoyable. All in all, the actual music sounded a good old 3.5/5. Keep job the great work!
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