sounds like you have great ideas in your head! the thing is, i think, you need to organize your thoughts a little more. there are alot of off notes not in the chord. your percussion is great! your notes kinda flutter everywhere, except towards the end. the end was good.
Thanks for the review, I struggled with the muddy sound of the song for awhile, the problem being multiple counter melodies going on at once ( 4 total at one point). What I had thought to do is split up the song and play through every melody but the song would be like 7 min that way haha =p.