I really like the 1st 30 seconds of the track it has this setup and melody style you really dont see often and even less achieved effectively now when you introduced the high hats it kinda ruined it for me honestly maybe have it down sampled or something because it is a higher hz frequency than most of the other instruments, it sticks out way more than it needs to, now at 1:00 i would take that gap between the 2 sections and put it together closer and transition to the "2nd part" now the 2nd part would sound alot better if you make if feel more like a chill part a diversion from chaos more or less. other than that i dont really know how else to explain any solution them the ending part doesnt feel right im not sure how but it does but overall this isnt terrible in the terms that it is a demo, it can use quiet a bit of work but i can see some potential in you. have a good day!