I like the atmosphere at the beginning. The synths are a little cliche, as is the clap sample. It’s also a little slow to progress. I like the cross-fading at around :35. The mid-range bass at :45 seems a bit out-of-place amidst all the upbeat synth patterns. The kick gets a little lost in the mix at 1:30, and overall the drop there didn’t compliment the mood of the piece up to that point very much at all. I think you needed to make more of a gradual progression from the relaxed mood earlier in the piece to the intensity and drive later on. Until around 2:10, you change up the texture a lot without much forewarning in the form of drum-led transitions, phrasing, or dynamics. The part at 2:05 sounds like a completely different piece from the rest of the track, and the transition back into familiar content at 2:26 is very abrupt. I think you need to consolidate some of your ideas here and work on making a more cohesive whole. The fade-out at around 3:50 confused me, and I think the transition at 3:58 doesn’t work too well as far as channeling the energy goes. The part at 4:00 is a very similar story to that of 1:30. You have a lot of instruments in there that sound really harsh and unpolished - even if you’re going for a hard-hitting feel, the synths should still blend in well, and they really don’t here. It’s hard to follow the harmonic progression of the piece after the 4-minute mark because the texture is so variational that it lacks coherence. Overall, I think you need to think a lot more about the mood, progression, and harmonies here, and how those elements interact to make the piece sound both smooth-flowing and cohesive. This piece provides some enjoyable melodic content and atmosphere, though. Keep at it, man!
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