ok, so. first of all, the note are on different scales (?). like, there are some D, some E, some C, and to make a good melody you should choose only one of those. second, the basses, they're not too bad, but they could have been more rythmic, if you put them like this they're just some kind of sub and won't keep in mind to anyone; the basses are the most important thing if you're making a trap/rap base, if you aren't, they are important too 8), so, make some variations to them 8))). last but not least, the iHats were the same during every beat of the song, making it boring; the bells in the BG were well done, i appreciated them, although sometimes they were discordant from the main melody.
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